SOUND OF THE SOUL
A hint of autumn is in the air
You can feel the crispness in the winds
sound of the soul
And gentle breeze touch your skin
As I listen I can hear the ripples on the water front
Summer fade into fall
Alight the dappled ways
The majestic of all
Whom may come this way
If is foretell
That this winter will be our worse to come
Fall will carry it own
The amber of winter will soon be
Upon us as the jack frost dose it tolls
Written By: Bettie Davis ————-© November 29 , 2o1o
There is a compelling immediacy and freshness in this that I like. The line “You can feel the crispness in the wind” is very evocative and bracing. However, “Fall will carry it own” does not work for me, it sticks out too much like a distracting conundrum. The picture reminds me the boating lake in our city park. This winter being our worse to come? You don’t by any chance live in the UK? We’re buried in snow.
So happy that ya came by for a read and enjoy this piece and the parts that entree ya is all good means that I did something right in my thinking this write out .. How ever No I do not live in the Uk yet might be a fun place ta visit …
Thanks for reading ..
Hugs Now